上海黄浦区2016-2020年五年高考二模英语试题汇编 作文专题 Word版含解析.doc

1上海黄浦区20162020年五年高考二模英语试题汇编作文专题2020届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题VIGuidedWriting66DirectionsWriteanEnglishcompositionin120150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese你校学生会正开展主题为ThefirstjobIwanttotake的英语征文比赛请你撰文参加文中请不要出现真实的校名和人名你的征文内容需包括1离开校园步入社会后你想从事的第一份职业是什么2你想从事这份职业的原因可从个人特点职业价值等方面进行阐述答案ThefirstjobIwanttotakeaftergraduationfromcollegeisadoctorThereasonsareasfollowsFirstlythenewcoronavirushasbroughtsufferingandmisfortunetomanypeopleallovertheworldwhichgivesmetheideaofbeingadoctorIhopetocontributetopeopleshealthinthefutureSecondlyIamapersonwholikestochallengemyselfAlthoughitisveryhardtostudymedicineIlikethechallengesitbringsandmakegreateffortstostudyitwellThirdlyasadoctorIcaneliminatethepainandrelievethediscomfortofotherswhichwillbringmeasenseofaccomplishmentInsummarybeingadoctorcanrealizemydreamIwillstudyhardenteragoodmedicaluniversitycontinuetopracticeandstrivetobecomeanexcellentdoctor解析分析2本篇书面表达是一篇征文你校学生会正开展主题为ThefirstjobIwanttotake的英语征文比赛请你撰文参加详解这是一篇提纲类作文我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来动笔前一定要认真分析要点不能遗漏要点1离开校园步入社会后你想从事的第一份职业是什么2你想从事这份职业的原因可从个人特点职业价值等方面进行阐述写作时注意准确运用时态上下文意思连贯符合逻辑关系尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次根据写作要点我们可以初步确定文章可能使用到的词汇和短语及句子有ThefirstjobIwanttotakeaftergraduationfromcollegeisadoctorThereasonsareasfollowsthenewcoronaviruscontributetopeopleshealthinthefuturechallengemyselfmakegreateffortseliminatethepainandrelievethediscomfortofothersasenseofaccomplishmentBeingadoctorcanrealizemydreamstudyhardenteragoodmedicaluniversitystrivetobecomeanexcellentdoctor可以使用的衔接词1表文章结构顺序FirstofallFirstlyFirstSecondlySecondAndthenFinallyIntheendAtlastAboveall2表并列补充关系WhatismoreBesidesMoreoverFurthermoreInadditionaswellasnotonlybutalso通过词汇铺垫我们就很容易地行文了文章写完之后要检查文中是否存在拼写或语法错误点睛范文内容完整要点全面语言规范语篇连贯词数适当上下文意思连贯符合逻辑关系作者在范文中使用了主从复合句FirstlythenewcoronavirushasbroughtsufferingandmisfortunetomanypeopleallovertheworldwhichgivesmetheideaofbeingadoctorThirdlyasadoctorIcaneliminatethepainandrelievethediscomfortofotherswhichwillbringmeasenseofaccomplishment这两句话运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句AlthoughitisveryhardtostudymedicineIlikethechallengesitbringsandmakegreateffortstostudyitwell这句话运用了although引导的让步状语从句使用了一些固定词组如asfollowscontributetomakegreateffortsrealizemydream全文中没有中国式英语的句式显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力另外文章思路清晰层次分明上下句转换自然为文章增色添彩2019届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题VIGuidedWriting76DirectionsWriteanEnglishcompositionin120150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese假如你是明启中学的高三学生李华你的朋友李楠想在高考结束后报班学习驾驶或者第二外语他发邮件3向你询问有没有兴趣一起学习请给他回复一封电子邮件必须包括以下内容你愿意一起报班学习并告知感兴趣的内容二选一阐述你选择的理由注意文中请不要出现真实的校名人名答案IntheEmailyoumentionedyouwanttosignupforclasstolearndrivingorasecondforeignlanguageafterthecollegeentranceexaminationandaskedmewhetherIaminterestedinlearningittogetherIthinklearningtodriveisgoodinsuchalongvacationWiththedevelopmentofsocietyeveryonewillhavetheirowncarsothatitsnecessaryforustodrivecarsIfwelearntodrivingcarsintheholidayswecanpractisedrivingeverydaywhichismuchfasterthanonlyinyoursparetimeNextknowingthatweareabletodrivecarsmakesusmoreconfidentWhatsmoretheabilitytodrivebringsusindependenceandconveniencewhichmeansyoucangowhereverandwheneveryouwantMydearfrienddoyouthinksoIamlookingforwardtoreceivingyourapplyYoursLiHua解析分析本文为应用文你的朋友李楠想在高考结束后报班学习驾驶或者第二外语他发邮件向你询问有没有兴趣一起学习你给他回复一封电子邮件内容包括你愿意一起报班学习并阐述你选择的理由详解本文为邮件即书信体书信体一般包括三个部分第一部分是写信的目的即我愿意和你一起4学驾驶第二部分叙述学驾驶的好处可以从以下几个方面写如可每天练习开车学的快开车让我们更自信会带来了独立和便利等最后一部分写期待对方的回信写作时多用高级词汇句式相对要灵活些单句与复句相结合在列举理由时要用顺序连词上下文意思连贯同时注意要求的字数不要太多也不要太少点睛本文符合书信体的要求文中运用了一引起较高级的词汇如signupforbeinterestedinpractisedoingsththeabilitytodosparetimewhatsmore等句式相对灵活多样有一些较高级的句式如宾语从句askedmewhetherIaminterestedinlearningittogether状语从句everyonewillhavetheirowncarsothatitsnecessaryforustodrivecars定语从句wecanpractisedrivingeverydaywhichismuchfasterthanonlyinyoursparetime非谓语knowingthatweareabletodrivecarsmakesusmoreconfident定语从句中有一个状语从句theabilitytodrivebringsusindependenceandconveniencewhichmeansyoucangowhereverandwheneveryouwant等这些都彰显了文章的档次2018届上海市黄浦区高考二模英语试题VIGuidedWriting76DirectionsWriteanEnglishcompositionin120150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese假设你是社区老年之家志愿者协会的负责人李明近期准备组织老人们到公园踏春赏花请就此活动写一份申请报告给社区相关负责人申请报告中请不要出现真实的校名和人名你的申请报告需包括1此次活动的主旨和安排2需要社区提供的支持如人员经费等答案InordertopromotethetraditionalvirtueofrespectingtheoldandlovingtheyoungoftheChinesenationandenrichthelifeoftheelderlyourvolunteerassociationofhomefortheelderlyaregoingtotaketheelderlytoenjoythespringflowersthisweekendAfterthediscussionwechooseNanhuParkasourdestinationwhichhasapicturesquesceneryandattractsalargenumberoftouristseverydayWhatsmoreitisclosetoour5communityanditisconvenientforustoforustogetthereAstherearesomeelderlypeopleinourcommunitywhoaretoooldtowalkfarwedecidetorentseveralwheelchairsandpushthemtheretoenjoytheflowersbutweareshortofmoneysowehopethatourcommunitycanprovidesomefinancialsupporttopayforthecostofrentingwheelchairsIwouldappreciateitifwecangetyourapproval解析分析本篇书面表达是提纲类作文要求写一封申请报告详解第1步根据提示可知本文要求写一封申请报告假设你是社区老年之家志愿者协会的负责人李明近期准备组织老人们到公园踏春赏花请就此活动写一份申请报告给社区相关负责人申请报告中请不要出现真实的校名和人名你的申请报告需包括1此次活动的主旨和安排2需要社区提供的支持如人员经费等时态应为一般现在时第2步根据写作要求确定关键词组如traditionalvirtue传统美德volunteerassociation志愿者协会picturesque风景如画的scen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